It’s just a bunch of short, straightforward statements about what the sky looked like above your house as the ambulance pulled away with no siren. Great, thanks for the introspection Weather Dot Com (that’s your nickname because of this Haiku). So you matched up the syllable count (thanks to one contraction). Big deal. It’s not going to bring your Dad back so try a rewrite until you come up with a haiku that does because that’s what this is all about, right? Getting him back?
Happy Your Haiku About The Day Your Dad Died Is Terrible Day!